More Story Changes

I had a tutorial with Steve and Kevin this morning, the points of discussion were:

  • Add lots of close-ups of knitting (scarf for moon), sewing and blowing up balloon
  • Come into the story in the middle – Thomas is already knitting as he is looking out of the window at the moon

I will be adjusting my animatic to add some changes, and then it is on to the animated layout!

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Tuesday 17th November, 2009. story. Comments off.

Animatic

I presented my animatic this afternoon (video to follow when it uploads!)

I also had a tutorial with Jeremy regarding my animatic. The points/changes discussed were:

  • Thomas could be seen with the blanket wrapped round his shoulders at the window to emphasise the cold – looks at it draped over his arm rather than looking at it on the bed
  • Re-order shots where he taps the moon to wake it up
  • Do not show the moon wearing the scarf as soon as it is given
  • Change final scene – have Thomas waving at the moon through the window (as at the beginning of the film). It comes out from behind the clouds and the scarf is seen then

Tuesday 10th November, 2009. animatic, story. Comments off.

Story & Character Design Changes

I had a tutorial with Dan and Jeremy this morning and the following points were discussed:

  • Thomas needs to interact with the moon somehow, so that he is seen onscreen with it for longer – this is important as it is the climax of the film
  • He should perhaps give the moon a present – ideas included something living (e.g. a plant or a fish in a bowl) or a scarf that matches his own (to show that he cares – the moon could be feeling cold and this is why it’s sad)
  • The final scene where the sun rises and the moon disappears should be dropped – the moon going away gives a feeling of sadness when it should be a happy scene
  • He should either be seen waving goodbye while it is still nighttime, or have the moon smiling through the window at him tucked up in bed
  • Thomas’ character design should be adjusted so that his facial features match the moon’s – i.e. his nose should be made longer

Based on the feedback I received, here is the updated (and hopefully final) character design for Thomas:

Tuesday 3rd November, 2009. character designs, story. Comments off.

Storyboard Presentation

The outline of my story is as follows:

It is night time and a tall house stands alone in the mountains, dark except for a single window on the top floor. A small boy, alone in this big house, gazes out. He notices the moon in the sky, also alone, and realises that it looks sad – it too must be lonely. He grabs the blanket from his bed and begins sewing.

Going outside, he reveals the hot air balloon he has made. He takes off into the sky, only stopping once he is in front of the moon. The moon is surprised to see him, but they begin chatting and are soon friends.

As the sun begins to rise the boy returns back to the ground. He looks up and waves goodbye to his new friend. The moon fades away as the sky lightens, but it is now smiling as it, and the boy, are no longer lonely.

I presented my storyboards today and they got a positive reaction, which was good. People liked that the character I’d used in them (a sort of placeholder blob-person) was very simple and thought it seemed to work well, so I will try to keep my character design as simple as I can. It was suggested however that some more shots were needed when the boy reaches the balloon, and that something happens to show them interacting, such as him giving the balloon a present – this is something I need to think about and figure out.

Tuesday 27th October, 2009. story. Comments off.